Plant Praise

Kitchen is messed

need to get dressed

go now

 

Garden is waiting

day celebrating

come bow

 

Altar most striking

candle bush spiking

pray vow

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dVerse prompt to write a lai – an old French form

Plant Praise

7 thoughts on “Plant Praise

  1. Glenn Buttkus says:

    You used the form well, though I got a little lost with the shift of focus in the last tercet. I agree this form is challenging, but brave poets go forth into the fray; smile

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  2. Beverly Crawford says:

    Nice handling of a difficult challenge! (I had a little trouble getting from the garden to the altar too, but well done)

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  3. I really like the urgency of the opening lines, Jane, which is conveyed by the long and short lines, and the way the lai slows down with the thought of the garden and a day celebrating, even though the line lengths are pretty much the same, created by the use of the continuous form and the repetition of ‘ing’, like a bell chiming.

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