Hoya

Wasn’t it this time

last  year

that  your hoya

blossomed

and in your excitement

and joy

you plucked

its single delicate

flower

to bring

to me?

——————-

Written January 19, 1978 for Bob McAllister’s poetry class
Bainbridge Island, WA

Comments or critique from Bob:

Excitement and joy, one or other,  both are too extended.
Nature – a single flower central experience.
Haiku form with one short thought or can take two
and usually does contrast.

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Hoya

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